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Tachyonic

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Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

So I'm writing a letter to Shakespeare about the play Macbeth and we have only gotten up to Act 1 Scene 5. What we are writing about is if we were the director of the play, how we would make the play better. Remember that Macbeth was performed on a live stage in an old theatre, so there isn't any real technology like we have today; so no smoke machines, no Computer Generated Graphics, no voice changes, only old-fashioned stuff. I believe it needs to have creative ideas and for the love of God; Please. Use. Grammar.
My teacher is very strict about grammar.

So I'll start it off with an introduction and a paragraph;

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Dear Mr. Shakespeare,
        I have recently discovered your play Macbeth and I think it's incredible! I couldn't have made a better play even if I tried. Though I have noticed some small design flaws that I think could be improved, or just general ideas that could make the play better.

Weather is one of the most used effects to create an atmospheric mood. When the three witches show up on the stage, one of the best ways to create an eerie mood is to have thunder and lightning sounds in the background. I have one or two tricks up my sleeve to try and create rain on the theatre.
For one, there are a few ways to create the sound of rain smashing on the floor, but the idea I have is if you tap your fingernails rather loudly on the wooden floor. I'm not sure how, but if you amplify the sound to make it louder, then you can easily set the mood.
Secondly, you can try and create rain yourself. A possible solution is if you acquire a sheet of any material, preferably sponge, if the sheet doesn't have holes in, poke quite a few holes randomly throughout the sheet. Gain a bucket of water and pour the water through the holes and you can create raindrops easily.
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killingpepper123

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

Ok. For the mood, you can add smog at the bottom of the scene! The audience will be in the mood even more!

OrangeCrix

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

For the scene where he kills King Duncan

I understand that you feel the need to use goat blood to act as human blood, but this is problematic. Rather than using goat blood, why not convert to the use of dyed water so the cleanup isn't as bad.

You can expand on that.

Last edited by OrangeCrix (May 8 2012 8:24:33 pm)

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

So, it said :   I couldn't have made a better play even if I tried. Though I have noticed some small design flaws that I think could be improved, or just general ideas that could make the play better.
It should've been :   I can't make a better play even if I tried, although I have noticed some small design flaws that I think could be improved along with general ideas that could make the play better.

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Tachyonic

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

Ok. For the mood, you can add smog at the bottom of the scene! The audience will be in the mood even more!

And how, exactly, can you create Smog?

Everyone else has great ideas.

ILoveBacon

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

And how, exactly, can you create Smog?

Tell him to get a time machine and go into the future to get a machine that will create smog.

Also, you only described one thing and 2 ways you could solve it, the mood. Why not add anither para graph explaining something else.
Wouldn't this count as cheating?

Tachyonic

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Re: Some English Homework that I hope you could help me on

Wouldn't this count as cheating?

It's not a test. And asking strangers over the internet is basically just asking your parents, except that there are more people to talk to. As far as I'm concerned, asking your parents isn't somewhat illegal.