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#1 Before February 2015

SilverStar
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Half Asleep Madness

Late on a dark, cold, rainy, night,
I tangle my covers filled with fright.

Something is grabbing my neck you see,
Wrapping around it so I cannot get free.

Surfacing back to reality; realizing it is only hair,
Yet my night gets much stranger, there are more things to share.

An earthquake strikes, but when I realize it is just thunder,
Am I going mad? I begin to wonder.

Snow falls from the ceiling, onto my head,
Covering me gently as if I were dead.

My grandpa here, my childhood friend there,
My dead loved ones are screaming everywhere.

There is a twinkle somewhere across the room,
I must have it. I must have it soon.

Sliding out of bed to reach this shiny mass,
Red trickles from my finger as I realize it is shattered glass.

I drop back into the warm covers, understanding this psychological attack,
When like a whip, something strikes my back.

I cringe in fear and in fright,
And turn around getting ready to fight.

Comprehending that this insanity must stop,
I run for the bathroom for this nightmare is non stop.

I splash my face with water, soaking it wet,
Telling myself that I have nothing to fret.

I look up at the mirror and what do I see?
A distorted rotting figure looking back at me.

I break down from the fear that I cannot end,
But sweetly and slowly, into real sleep I blend.

I wake up the next morning, on the bathroom floor.
Thank God this nightmare is no more.

Cuts are on my hand and a red mark on my back, but now it is all right.
However, there is no one that will know what will happen tomorrow night.

Last edited by SilverStar29 (Mar 3 2012 9:57:36 am)


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#2 Before February 2015

xRichTofenx
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Re: Half Asleep Madness

Wow good job on the poetry I love it so much I love how you put this together very good job.

#3 Before February 2015

SilverStar
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Re: Half Asleep Madness

Thanks, and this is a true story.
<:l am I insane?

Last edited by SilverStar29 (Mar 3 2012 10:39:09 am)


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#4 Before February 2015

xRichTofenx
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Oh cool It really sounded real. //forums.everybodyedits.com/img/smilies/big_smile

#5 Before February 2015

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Re: Half Asleep Madness

I love it, not a line stuck out (lengthwise), it blended well, and it tells a story.


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#6 Before February 2015

Lashkar
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Very nice. I agree with what Zoey2070 said.

#7 Before February 2015

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very nice, good job! //forums.everybodyedits.com/img/smilies/smile

#8 Before February 2015

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Very nice job! //forums.everybodyedits.com/img/smilies/big_smile

#9 Before February 2015

SilverStar
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Re: Half Asleep Madness

Harsh criticism anyone?


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#10 Before February 2015

Tachyonic
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I see no flaws.

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#11 Before February 2015

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Wow...     This is great... //forums.everybodyedits.com/img/smilies/big_smile


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#12 Before February 2015

SilverStar
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Bump //forums.everybodyedits.com/img/smilies/smile


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#13 Before February 2015

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Moved to Creative per owner's request.

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#14 Before February 2015

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This is so cool (>w<)

#15 Before February 2015

SilverStar
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Re: Half Asleep Madness

Thanks!

BTW I like the face! (>w<)


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#16 Before February 2015

fluff13 f0x
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Arigato! Now I gotz two people who lieks the face. (^w^)

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