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Haze123

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Rewins of the Robber {A story written by Haze123}

It's a Sunday night in the woods with my two friends. We're a little lost but we found some shelter. But let me start from the beginning.

"Derrick! What are you doing in your room?" "I'm changing for the party, Mom!" "Okay! Don't forget to wear a sweater!"
I get on my bike and ride to Josh's house.

When I got there half of my friends were there. "Sup' Derrick!" said Daniella. Daniella moved to another school but she still knows where we live. "Heeey!" I responded, happily. "Wheres Josh? Is he here?" "Josh is in his backyard" said Dwaine. "Wanna go see him?" "Yeah" I said

After we found him, texting, laughing, on the fence Dwaine and I said hi. "Hey, Josh! Happy Birthday!" we both said.
"Yeah... Hi" He said, sleepily. A shot was fired. It was only a firework.
"So why do you sound all sleepy?" Dwaine asked. "Reasons" Josh replied. "What does that supposed to mean?" I asked. "It means that i'm not really sleepy. I just sounded sleepy" said Josh. Dwaine and I glanced at each other. "So... did you get any pre---" Dwaine stopped. A scream was heard. The sound of the laughing kids stopped too. We all ran into the house and hid. A guy with a shot gun passed by one of the windows. We all trieed to hide form him not to be seen. All the lights were turned off. He passed by...
We all turned back on the lights when he passed by and left. We all thought we left. We were wrong.
5 shots were fired in the house screaming were heard. A parent called the police, hoping not to be seen. 2 more shots were fired. Some kids ran outside in the backyard we were all pushing and shoving and then we all were screaming still. We follow them outside. I was with Josh and Dwaine. Some other people followed us into the entrance of the garage. We all hid in there for half an hour.
We were all sure the robber was gone because there were no more shots heard or steps. We all exited out the garage and the robber was gone. We were all sure. Everyone survived with us in the garage.
We all started the party again. Instead of laughing there were whispering. The robber came back.
We were all scattering everywhere Alot of shots were fired then everyone were bumping into eachother i was in a group of people then i hit my head on someone then i followed everyone all around with parents everywhere and then a few more shots had gone then I was sure the robber's shot gun ran out of bullets then the cops came we were really happy. We were frightened again. The robber and the cops grabbed some one and put then re-loaded the gun and put it to the kid's head. The cops talked with him for a bit then they shot. We were all really frightened we all were running around then most of us fell down.
Everything went black.
To be continued...
Fun Facts: "Josh" is really a friend of mine in my class. He is having a birthday party in July.
I'm invited. He's gonna show me where he lives also You can represent "Derrick" the main character as me. and "Dwaine" as my other friend (Dwaine is not his real name. Also Derrick is not my name either) Will write the rest tomorrow or later or after that.

Last edited by haze123 (May 13 2012 8:07:03 pm)

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mangoman

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Re: Rewins of the Robber {A story written by Haze123}

Proofread.

Very nice, just a little confusing.

CANT WAIT FOR MORE!!!!!