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Jabatheblob1

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Life as a teen.

So my name is Rick. I am a "normal" guy grew up in a weird town not unusual. I decided to write this journal when my life took a turn for the worst, but before i get to that let me tell you a little about myself.

I grew up in a town called Portland, one mom, one dad, two sisters, one older, one younger and that was that. I weighed 9 pounds 11 ounces not like anyone who reads this will care. When i was born i had a birth defect. The nurse said that something went wrong in the development stage of the pregnancy.

My mom instantly thought that i had down syndrome and started to cry. She later found out that I didn't have down, i only had a Coloboma which is a messed up eye long story short. 1/10,000 chance. Didn't change me much just people wondered, "what's wrong with your eye".

As a kid i grew up, went to Elementary school, got passing grades, things were fine. Well.. Until the first hiccup in my life hit me. I was in the 4th grade. I just came home from a long day. Came home to my parents both upstairs and my sister sitting downstairs. I didn't think much of it and went to play videogames. A hour later my parents call me into their room. My mom's eyes are red with bags underneath. Immediately i think that someone has died and it's someone close.

They begin the whole we love you speech. Short speech only lasted 4 sentences. "We love you very much. This isn't your fault in any way, but me and your mother are splitting up. It's no ones fault, we just don't get along anymore. If you have any questions you can always ask us." I didn't really realize the impact on my life that would have until later..   When i really realized why my parents split up.

I barely cried. My sisters got upset at me for not crying that night. I went back to playing video games hoping that they would come back in saying it was all a sick joke... but no. That wasn't the case. Now this isn't a story about how sad my life is that's far from what i want this to be, but every story has to start somewhere right?... anyways later that night is when it really hit me. When my dad walked into my room and he was crying. The absolute worst thing of that night was seeing my own father crying. The person that i always look up to. The man i thought couldn't ever cry, was sobbing on my bed. He sat on my bed for a few minutes before saying, "I love you son, goodnight." and turned off the light and left my room.

That is the last day. That my mother and my father ever would be together as a couple.

I talk to my mom later that night when her and i couldn't sleep. She was downstairs and i could hear her on the phone. She was talking to my aunt and she was bawling.

God this is the saddest journal in the world.. Anyways i will leave that topic right now and get into some happier stuff.

After my parents split up my dad found a cheap apartment down the street, i stayed at the same school and switched houses which was pretty neat for a kid. I shared a bed with my sisters until i couldn't handle it and slept on the floor. With my dad we pretty much would walk to this pizza place, pick up a pre made pizza and brought it home. We would always talk about our day on the walk and it was always a blast.

Things were good at home. I was gonna get by.

I joined a soccer team with a few of my friends and kept that same team for 10 years. we started when we were 5, on and off playing basketball and soccer. We were best in state for soccer winning the tournament but losing qualifying for nationals. We weren't as great at basketball, but it was all fun because i was always with my friends.

That was pretty much my childhood. I played sports and hung out with friends.

Now to present day. Where i am right now. Is the reason why i am writing this journal. I am stuck here and i need to keep my head straight. The worst thing that can happen to me now is if they would ever find where i am.

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

2/10 it was ok

tak4n

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Re: Life as a teen.

Divorced parents is a common issue and it does suck. As long as you know it's not your fault you should get through it. You will still see both of your parents. It might be tough at first but I hope you can get through it fine.

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Calicara

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Re: Life as a teen.

Before I write something legit, I need to know if this is real or not. Because my parents are divorced, and I can give some genuine advice.

Last edited by Calicara (Sep 2 2014 6:34:58 pm)

Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

My parents are actually divorced and it did happen when i was a kid, this isn't a story to vent my feelings this was going to be a fictional story which some events are based off of my life because i am uncreative for the most part haha

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Calicara

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Re: Life as a teen.

Oh ok! My parents got divorced when I was like 11-12. I didn't really understand it much at the time. I lived with my mom, and had scant visitation with my dad (I don't like my dad for an assortment of reasons.) So after I while I stopped visitation and just grew up with my mom.
Glad to see you are taking something tragic though and turning it into creative thought. Writing is a good way to express your feelings.

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

...but as a story, it doesn't get very far.

Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

i am not a great writer and i am taking college courses including writing this year so i thought might as well try
plus i wrote this at 3am..

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

i am not a great writer

i am taking college courses including writing

okay then

Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

Rather get it over with now and get help from my dad who is a professional writer than do it on my own in college

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

okay, but this a really bad story

mrjawapa

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Re: Life as a teen.

My parents were never married, but split up when I was about a year old. I never seen my dad again until about 2-3 years ago when I had to do a family tree and called him asking if he remembered me
Many years later my mom and dad are back together, doing great.

Before that my mom did get married to another guy, but they got a divorce because he became abusive. At first I didn't really know what was going on, but everything turned out alright

I don't like my dad for an assortment of reasons.

I don't like the one guy just because he is an ****.

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Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

thank you for the criticism any thoughts on how to help?
and yeah divorces kinda suck but it's all good now

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

well i don't know, i like to avoid writing because it sucks

it is hard to make a good story

Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

i agree but it's going to be with me for two more years so i got to get somewhat good at it

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

yeah okay good luck, don't write about your own life

Calicara

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Re: Life as a teen.

It's hard to write down all my thoughts of writing and the process of story telling, but I can lend a few tips I have picked up over my two years at university.
One, never give up. Most writers start terrible. My early scribbles are horrible, and I dread rereading old work (though sometimes it inspires me seeing how much better I've gotten.)
Second, don't make stuff up. Any good writer writes based on personal experience of after much research. One of the best advice I got from a professor was, "If you write more than you read you are probably a terrible writer." Many young writers assume that stories are just made up, as if the author wrote them overnight. That is not true. I once watched a video by Cornelia Funke who quoted, "For every 1 book I write, I read 50 or more books for research." Always, always, always do your research.
Third, don't hesitate. Never hesitate to write down your thoughts. It doesn't matter how horrible they are at first, just writing everything you want to say at first will help you organize your ideas later. If you try to edit and write at the same time, you'll end up becoming frustrating and more often than not end up with something completely different than when you started (which may not always be good.)
Lastly, proofread. Have many people examine your works, not just your father. Different people can offer different perspectives, which may or may not help you improve your story. It's always good to consider you story from multiple angles though, and consider what you're trying to say. It's also important to know your characters, you want to make sure they are relatable in some sorts. You have to remember while you are omniscient the reader is not, and so you must be able to explain things in a way that they understand.
Other than that writing well just comes from much experience. You will learn over time, and I'm sure many others will give you advice too.

mrjawapa

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Re: Life as a teen.

I am awful at writing anything. I can think and say things just fine, but when I start writing it gets very unorganized and sounds awful.

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Fdoou

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Re: Life as a teen.

well don't take my advice too seriously, this is coming from someone who avoids storytelling

but yes yes yes write down every idea ever

mrjawapa

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Re: Life as a teen.

well don't take my advice too seriously, this is coming from someone who avoids storytelling

but yes yes yes write down every idea ever

For me, that usually gets me in trouble.

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Calicara

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Re: Life as a teen.

I am awful at writing anything. I can think and say things just fine, but when I start writing it gets very unorganized and sounds awful.

Another good advice, "You think smarter than you sound." My college professors have always said that, and I believe it.
Writing well isn't an instant process. It takes years of reading, writing, and revision. If you're writing starts out bad that's good, because you can only get better from there.

Jabatheblob1

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Re: Life as a teen.

Well thank you for the helo : )

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