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theredtigers

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The Haunted Tree -- for the contest

this is my comp lvl its 100% solo made
[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gaa0kIU3J8Y[/youtube]
http://beta.everybodyedits.com/games/PWw0hu5MD-a0I
http://everybodyedits.com/games/PWw0hu5MD-a0I

go get all the coins and blue coins to win!! and get to the ghost good luck

Edits : 1 : updated the stars with a sort of glow
              2 : updated some minis because people say thay are to hard
              3 : did some shading
              4 : placed some decorations

Special thx to : Thegame for testing

Last edited by theredtigers (Oct 30 2011 9:40:14 am)

MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: The Haunted Tree -- for the contest

Its a good world for a soloist but i feel there is imporvements to be had on the art. I will go into detail on that in a minute. But first ill will give suggestions for the minis. They are a bit ragey :/ for a newbie judge i fear they will be considered 'to hard' or just they are to ragey all together. I think they are good and are not at all nooby, but like i said they are too ragey and are easy to fall back on.

As for the art, i think you need to work a little bit on shading and shape. For example the tree its a... ...fairly good shape, but the shading lacks in brown/barky pallete colours. But one thing i did notice is that the shading on all the objects correspond with the light source. But for the grass the shape looks kinda weird, and its all one colour.

ART: 6-7/10 (its good but take my suggestions)
MINIS: 6-7/10 (a bit ragey but i can see effort have been put into them)

AVERAGE: 6-7/10

A good world that should get within the top 20 in my books atleast. Well done! and Good Luck!

fox_boy

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Re: The Haunted Tree -- for the contest

cool! Feedback:

Art: the tree was un-natural and lacked the actual shape of a real tree. all other art was, say, boring and unatractive. If anything, improve the positioning of the art and its shape. For example: instead of 3 graves scattered around the map, why not a graveyard in one spot, with ghosts above it or next to it?

Minis: The first few were small, making them confined and ragey. the others were made with a normal arrow-path concept that could be your downfall. try to make them seem more original

Minis:3/10
Art: 4/10

Overall: 3-4/10

Last edited by fox_boy (Oct 29 2011 3:39:47 pm)

EEguy

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Re: The Haunted Tree -- for the contest

I'm not very good at minis, and I got annoyed by a mini at the beginning so I'm only gonna review the art.

-The tree looks very unrealistic, and I don't get why it's "wavy". The top of the tree is full of blanks, I don't know if you want it that way or not, but in my opinion it doesn't look good.

-The other objects were "boring" and they looked randomly placed. They could also use a bit more shading. I didn't get "attracted" by the art as I did in some other contest levels. As fox boy said, you could make a graveyard instead of scattering graves around the map. The moon looks good, but it's too yellow. And there is something in the stars that makes them look not so good. The text, though, was good.

Overall, I'd give it a 5-6/10 Sorry :/

theredtigers

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Re: The Haunted Tree -- for the contest

ok thx for the feedback i will edit it abit and remeber the tree was haunted