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Ralaina

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The Mirage at Colton.

The Mirage at Colton.

Can Thou find all the hidden pieces of the map of the mansion? It has been ripped apart and hidden all over this pumpkinpatch. Only if Thou can find the pieces you may enter this mansion. Without it You will be lost in the mansions dwindling hallways.   You must assay, but beware of the curse that haunts this place. Or you will forever be trapped in the mirage that is Colton.

The Mirage at Colton.

Update on the story is coming later, since it's just something that I wrote in five minutes.

Enjoy.

Sincerely

GameGus
NiuFox
CatMan666
Oturan

P.S.

If we count all the hours we spent on this, it wouldn't even be 24 hours.

Last edited by Ralaina (Nov 8 2011 12:22:15 pm)

MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Railana i dont see you name on the list of members...

Anyway noice world.

Master1

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From: Crait

Joined: 2015-02-15

Posts: 4,452

Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Railana is oturan I think^
and nice level good luck on the contest

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MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Railana is oturan I think^
and nice level good luck on the contest

*Cough cough* Read his sig.

OFF-Topic: Matching sigees

Last edited by MRBOOGAWESOME (Nov 8 2011 12:33:16 pm)

Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

This time around i'm posting my last posts, I just wanted to be the one to post this.

RavaTroll

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From: France

Joined: 2015-02-16

Posts: 820

Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Just opened this thread and I immediatly said "Waaaaaooooow".
I guess it speaks for itself.

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Trolls be in da place, mon !

MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Ok i played for a little bit and i noticed something that is quite annoying. The minis on the right side of the map. When you have to do all those sort of like jumping from patch of dots to other, if you fall you have to start again. That bit is quite annoying...

Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

I was going to fix that, but I never got time to do it. So I know that the minis aren't as good as they could have been. But when the judging is over I will fix them. I have lot's of homework, so not much time has been spent on this map either. So some minis were just made in desperation. But the   fun factor will rise when I am done with the changes.

Last edited by Ralaina (Nov 8 2011 12:47:01 pm)

EENinja

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Seriously good.

Had a quick play of the minis and then left, but the art is amazing.

Easily top 12.

Yankeestar180

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Scoring for THE MIRAGE AT COLTON

ART
Building: 9/10 The only thing I would change is the shading. Looks VERY Cartoony on the roof. Good walls though.
Pumpkin Patch: 7/10 All is good except for the outline. It makes the beautiful pumpkins you made look not so good.
Grass: 8/10 I don't get the shading. is the lighter around the pumpkins. I would replace the dark with light, it would look MUCH better.
Rocks + Light: 9/10 That light made me speechless. Perfect. The shade left by the rocks: Not so perfect. Maybe replace the black cross-shade with umbrellas or rocks. Overall good.
Great Pumpkin: 9/10 All of it is good except for the eyes. They just seem oddly shaped. Good shading and stem.
Moon: 10/10 Good good. Perfect. No more
Clouds: 10/10 Again, perfect. The shaping, the shading: all perfect
Small Tree: 9/10 Good way to still make the tree on a tilt. Seems hard but you pulled it off. But it does look like one of the branches is just cut off straightly.
Balloon: 9/10 Great balloon, good shape, nice idea. I would just make the basket brown instead.

MINIS
I have yet to play... Ill update as soon as I play it.

MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Is this for the comp? Because, it's just. I don't see your level on the list, and now the submissions have closed... :O

Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Let's see then *cracks knuckles*

Will be back to edit as soon as my homework is done! It is for the competition, and we submitted in time. But Rpgmaster has forgotten to put us on the list. He has been pmed about it.

Last edited by Ralaina (Nov 9 2011 2:40:08 pm)

KanibalFrost

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

There goes 1st. place
You should probably take a picture of the minimap away from other bricks, because some may think that yellow color at the side is part of the level and not transparent.
I don't really have much to say about the level - haven't played it yet - but from the look of the minimap i bet that level is just awesome. Love the clouds, moon, mansion, pumpkins... Everything! Good work

Eld'tai'inn

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Grass: 8/10 I don't get the shading. is the lighter around the pumpkins. I would replace the dark with light, it would look MUCH better.

Great Pumpkin: 9/10 All of it is good except for the eyes. They just seem oddly shaped. Good shading and stem

Just want to peek in a little here As I see it, the light around the pumpkins are emitted from the pumkins themself. Since mostly every pumpkin is lit. And if they would make the dark spots lighter, what would be the lightsource?

For the pumpkin, how often do you not see a pumking with oddly carved eyes?

Just wanted to say that, but this map is looking good at least

Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

The things you mentioned, Eld, are how we thought of it all. No need to say anymore than that.
And that black cross shading doesn't look weird, unless you have your face about 10 centimeters from the computer. Have it around one meter and it looks good.
And I dont think it looks like one of the branches of the tree are cut off directly.
Neither I or my team mates find the roof VERY cartoony, But it was made to be a little cartoony.
The part with the outlining around the pumpkins is to make it look a bit more surreal and more mysterious.
And if you look closely the basket is brown on the ballon.

Muffin

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

2nd story needs more levels. All of your (3?) levels rock.

Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Please comment on the level and give us feedback :3 Even though i wanna keep the trend of out topics never getting many posts

Breadfinn

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Posts: 2,063

Re: The Mirage at Colton.

9999999999999999/10

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Ralaina

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

I'm bumping this for the last time, can we please get some feedback? We would appreciate it, because so far we have only gotten one serious comment with feedback.

Omicron

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Re: The Mirage at Colton.

Wow, This is an amassing world. I mean, Look at that moon. It's beautiful. And that Mansion.

The art is amassing but the pumpkins and the pumpkin shading can be improved.

The minis were great, but can be impoved. Overall, I give you a 9/10