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octodecillion

Formerly strider

Joined: 2015-02-18

Posts: 216

Devil's tower

I made this map on and off for about two weeks so don't mind the mini map to much.
Overall it took me about three hours to make.
It would also be nice if i could get some feedback on where i could improve.
thanks in advance!

Mini map:

Level: http://everybodyedits.com/games/PWrw9Jf382b0I

Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

STD

Formerly BenWanted

From: Binary by 0 and 1

Joined: 2015-08-19

Posts: 1,113

Re: Devil's tower

Nice level but instead of where the cake is when you beat it you should put a diamond. Buy it. Oh and where the Green jump thing is and health thing, gg. I got that and it was fun.

Nice level. 8/10 minis 6/10 art

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AmdS

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Joined: 2015-05-27

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Re: Devil's tower

strider wrote:
Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

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Hostage

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Joined: 2015-06-02

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Re: Devil's tower

strider wrote:
Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

no
use lenny face for sexual stuff

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some woman

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From: 4th dimension

Joined: 2015-02-15

Posts: 9,289

Re: Devil's tower

strider wrote:
Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

no
use lenny face for sexual stuff

looks like SOMEBODY's too young to understand what said sexual stuff is

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skullz17

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Joined: 2015-02-15

Posts: 6,699

Re: Devil's tower

strider wrote:
Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

no
use lenny face for sexual stuff

looks like SOMEBODY's too young to understand what said sexual stuff is

Still, it was a bit of a stretch. Comparing eating someone to sex.

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iPwner

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Re: Devil's tower

strider wrote:
Also if you don't play it i'll eat you!

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

no
use lenny face for sexual stuff

looks like SOMEBODY's too young to understand what said sexual stuff is

Still, it was a bit of a stretch. Comparing eating someone to sex.

actually it really wasn't. o-o i'm not sure if you kidz know what "eating" means... but i'll leave that to google.

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skullz17

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Joined: 2015-02-15

Posts: 6,699

Re: Devil's tower

( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

no
use lenny face for sexual stuff

looks like SOMEBODY's too young to understand what said sexual stuff is

Still, it was a bit of a stretch. Comparing eating someone to sex.

actually it really wasn't. o-o i'm not sure if you kidz know what "eating" means... but i'll leave that to google.

o wait. I did know that. I just didn't catch it at first.

EDIT: Decided to actually review this.

Aesthetics:
The minimap art looks alright. The building is nice, and the grass is cool. It's a nice style. But those ruins on the ground could be improved a lot. The shapes are odd and the darker gaps inside them look awkward. Also, they are mostly featureless, you should add some sort of detail to them. Maybe shade them? I think the lack of shading works for the ruined building, but not so much for the smaller ruins on the ground to the left. Also, I don't think the stone at the bottom is necessary. And the stone dotted around the dirt is not needed either. Neither of these look that great imo.

In-game, it looks good. You have avoided the mistake of focusing so much on minimap art that the in-game art looks bad. I think you have balanced in-game art and minimap art well, but you could still improve the minimap art more without it hurting the in-game feel.

Gameplay:
To be honest, minis aren't anything special. They all are very similar. Use sideways arrow to gain height to get to certain areas. That covers most of them. Often there's jumping off walls, trying to get past a wall of arrows, stuff like that. It's not a horrible crime, but the minis are also often annoying to complete, or just boring.

Overall:
It's an alright world. Minis need a lot of improvement, make sure they are not annoying and have more variation. For your art, take the parts that I said were good and try to make your art look more that.

6/10

I don't do reviews like this often. I don't know what made me decide to do it for this world in particular.

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thx for sig bobithan