ABVE From Beginning (Preparing to make into Book)

tak4n · 2015-05-15 07:26:56

Hey guys. There are many new people on the forums now who have never even heard about ABVE. It's a story that I decided to write on this forums which eventually turned out into a book. I originally started writing it when Master1 was writing his ATTWO story so it took quite a long time to write. I am going to be rewriting it and changing small details such as most references and names to make it more appropriate for a book. I am thinking of publishing it once I finish writing it, so please note out any significant spelling and grammatical errors that you will be able to find.

The story is basically a gladiator type battle style mixed with super natural stuff which includes A LOT of people from EE and the forums. If you haven't been in the story yet, you will not be added to the first book however I may add you to the second book which I am (sort of) writing now. The names of the books are going to be:
(blank) Eternal Darkness
(blank) Rebirth of the Sword
I am thinking of replacing blank with 'ABVE' but if you have any better suggestions I am more than happy to acknowledge them. So without further ado, I present to you a story which was planned to be 10k words but turned out to be 80k+ words... ABVE! I am thinking of updating this once every 2 days. Hope you enjoy!

Setting:

The story takes place around the Roman theme of gladiator fighting. The rules are simple, the battle continues until the first death. After the first death, depending on how the crowd liked the battle, the leader also known as the 'Lead One' of this event would rate the battle with his thumb, if his thumb is upwards, both teams get rest until further notice, if the thumb is down, both teams will fight again a lot sooner than planned. The story is also based around the four factions: Archangels, Brotherhood, Veterans, and Element (ABVE). Each faction has 4 groups, A, B, C, and D with each group containing 4 members each.

If a person in a group dies, the group is forced to find a new team member to cover up the missing slot. Each contestant volunteers to join the arena. The battle isn't revolved around simple sword and spear fighting (Although there is going to be a bit of that), the person gets injected with a drug giving him/her/it random powers, the possible motives for the person choosing this path include unlimited wealth after winning the tournament, unlimited power, strength, fame and glory. However, the motives can also be as simple as providing food and water for your family, getting money due to poverty, or getting revenge on someone that commit a murder on someone you knew.

A long, long time ago there were only two factions that went head to head in gladiator battles together to prove which one had more power. Team Brotherhood and team Veterans sent normal people, not mutated nor drugged to fight for fame and glory. However, it all changed once team Archangels and team Element came into the picture. The two new teams brought lead by two mysterious individuals which had effects of the drug. This made them too powerful and an agreement was signed that they would share the drug with the rest of the world. This brought more entertainment to the crowd and it also balanced the battles once again, however at this time no one knew about the consequences that came with the innovation of this drug.

The contestants were not the only ones who were affected by the effects of the drug. Royalties have also been injected with it mostly after attempts of assassination or other mysterious reasons, however the drug formula was able to be obtained and contained for purposes only inside the arena. However the question remained, could this powerful weapon truly be contained or was it too dangerous to handle?
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As the groups have been fighting for being #1, it was becoming obvious that team Element were not only dominant, but were also evil, only fighting for the fun of murder or recognition whereas other groups had actual goals they were aiming to achieve other than glory. Each group lived a normal life outside of the combat arena and when they met up, they usually done so in secret headquarters of their group. Due to being famous or disliked on the streets, most of the people fighting at the arena usually wore something over their faces so they wouldn't be recognised. It was a difficult life for some of them, yet this was the path they chose to take.

There are multiple arenas, not just a single one. The arenas are also connected to other arenas with at least two connections as the groups had to fight mini challenges before the battle on even terms. The group that would pass their challenge first would move forward into the general arena where they'd have a head start to set up against their opponents. It is difficult for the crowd to find the best seats and usually the mini challenge arenas were completely empty because the crowd would attempt to get the best seats in the general arena. The group members must learn to adapt to each person in the group to successfully pass the mini challenge and win the battle against their real opponents.

Some abilities can be harmful for allies as well as opponents which is why the group must prepare to counter this before the battle starts. Archangels have been known as the best team which has groups with most adaptability and members with the best communication skills. This allows them to use various global abilities without falling in danger. However there were many instances where the most unpredictable abilities had been used to which no one could have prepared. There were also many instances where group members would have murdered their own group members in order to survive for yet another round. Only one person needs to die each round, this thought can overcome the person making them commit actions they might regret later.

The drugs used on people were not always successful. In fact, there were times when the drug would give the person neutral or passive power, ones that do not hurt anyone. At first the 'Lead One' threw them into the arena to see what happens but after a lot of uninteresting deaths, people with failed mutations were simply banned from ever entering the arena. Sometimes, it ruined their life as they looked atrocious and were useless, sometimes it made their life more interesting like refilling water cups with interesting drinks without having to use any ingredients. The people were not allowed to try the drug again as double mutations could have given them an unfair advantage, this was only ever tested once and the person this was tested on ended up giving the crowd very enjoyable experience at first, but then the crowd got bored of this so this double mutated person was banned from the arena with the new law that a person would never be drugged more than once.

After receiving powers form drugs, there was nothing stopping anyone from causing havoc outside of the battlefield, everyone was almost invincible especially against people that had no powers. But since only people entering the arena had powers, what was stopping them from doing so? The drugs injected could have easily killed anyone from the inside, the drug inventor had only shared the secret of how to take advantage of the drug with the 'Lead One' as well as some other important people. If anyone would have tried to use the drug for purposes other than the arena, they would have been soon found dead. Or at least, that's what they told the contestants to make them more scared of the consequences that could come from abusing the drug effects.

Although the 'Lead One' is in charge of the arena and the battles, he was not in charge of the empire. This empire is controlled by the 'Royal One' and his word is above anyone else's. The 'Royal One' only had one daughter, his wife was assassinated years ago before the drug was even invented. His daughter, although in her teen years was able to rule the empire just as well as her father. Yet, she was not growing to become a politician like her father, she had the eager attitude to adventure although this could have been because she was a teenager. She both had the aspects of beauty and intelligence in her, she was truly an interesting individual. But most importantly, she was one of the first people to have been injected by the drug. Everyone speculated that the drug was invented as a weapon to kill her, however after the failed attempt she received powers which are much stronger than that of the modified drug used to control individuals.

The system, it was unfair but you were not allowed to question it. The 'Lead One' could make new rules every day, even half way through the battle and the contestants were not allowed to complain. Everyone hates the 'Lead One' it was Anarchy on the battlefield. Sometimes there was one battle per day, sometimes there were more. There were rarely more than three battles per day and teams that were given a thumb down would usually fight on different days. Who knew maybe your battle was due in two days yet you wake up to find out that the 'Lead One' had shifted your battle to today. One team was always prepared though, Team Element was ready to fight as often as was needed.

The old times were beautiful. There were only 2 teams, team Veterans and team Brotherhood, always fighting with similar strength. Never backing down, always showing equal strength, the crowd loved those days. So why were the other two teams created, who created them? What dark being decided to destroy the equilibrium? Everyone thought this would bring more entertainment, more enjoyment to see more than one team try to become #1, and it succeeded in a way. It brought more variety and differentiation in battle tactics to the field. Everyone seemed happy at first, then the enjoyment levels went down, but the crowd was so used to having 4 teams by that point that there was no point in returning everything to how it was before. Something did not seem right about Team Element and Team Archangels, something big was coming up and no one was doing anything about it.

Story:

Chapter One. The battles begin.

Day One, Segment One.
As the crowd grew loud, the north gate opened and a cold breeze from the gate made the crowd yell even louder. Four figures began to show their faces from the opened gate, team Brotherhood. Something was not right. Even though the crowd was loud, the four figures felt the sense of tension and discomfort. As the 'Lead One' whispered something to his right hand man, the right hand man quickly ran towards the drummers and as they began to play, the four figures quickly found a hail storm of arrows heading straight for them. Gabyss was the fastest to react, quickly creating a water shield absorbing the arrows and immediately slowing and eroding them while in the water. Honey then reacted to this situation by grabbing her bow with a quiver that contained 1 arrow. She began duplicating the arrows and firing 3 at a time, hitting every archer with a single arrow each. The shots were precise, not a single miss, quickly removing the archers without any trouble.

The group of 4 was out of danger once again, however it was not over. The gate on the other side of the field began to open. It did not take the crowd a long time to go quiet as everyone knew, team Element was on their way to ruin everyone's day. Everyone quickly recognised the four dark, discouraging faces consisting of Thwin, Decel, Tak, and Theditor.
"This is our day." M'One of team Brotherhood said to encourage the rest of his group.
"Easy!" Mobon quickly replied from the same group.
Honey then shot out 4 arrows heading precisely for all four members of team Element.

The first arrow went right through Thwin, but it did not seem like he cared, he remained standing as if nothing happened. The second arrow was caught and crushed by Tak's hand. The third arrow was easily dodged by Decel right as it was about to hit him. The fourth arrow didn't even reach Theditor, it seemed like he created a ball of void in front of the arrow which the arrow traveled through. The same void was created on the other side of the arena and the arrow came out from the void and hit Honey straight in her right arm, preventing her from firing anymore arrows. As Mobon became enraged by this, M'One quickly told him to stay back but Mobon did not listen. Mobon began creating numerous holograms of him, all of which were running straight at the other team, which was the real Mobon? As Thwin took out a spear he was carrying on his back, he threw it directly at one of the holograms, as it hit the hologram, all the other ones disappeared. Everyone quickly realised that Thwin hit the real Mobon.

As the crowd split into two, half of the crowd cheering to see Mobon's death and the other half boo’ing at team Element in disrespect as they made it seem too easy which the crowd strongly disliked. As 'Lead One' lifted his thumb sideways, then slowly turning it downwards, both team Element and team Brotherhood knew they would need to fight again very shortly, however team Brotherhood would need to find an alternative member during this time.

Day One, Segment Two:
An unknown figure was seen walking down the street. This unknown figure picked up a scroll from the stall and paid the stall keeper some gold for it, the unknown figure was on his way to a secret meeting. The figure walked behind a building and stood in front of a door, locked by an interesting system which could only be accessed by a few selected people. Everything in this world was old fashioned however scientists were using the drug to advance the technology systems. The figure placed the scroll onto a table of what seemed to be the main discussion room of the building he was in, took off his cloak to reveal himself. He was joined by two other figures at the table.

The scroll article said "A crazy one versus four battle at the arena ends up with the team of four all eliminated!" If you continued reading down the scroll, the paragraphs said "No one expected such a turn of events when a single person came out from the gates of team Element. Overconfident, team Veterans underestimated their challenger, sending out various attacks at him. However to their demise, they were all killed within seconds of their actions. The rules clearly stated only one person is supposed to be killed however the 'Lead One' did not have enough time to stop the battle as all four players were eliminated within seconds of one another. Although the crowd despised team Element, they were cheering this time around for the incredible strength of this person with the 'Lead One' pointing his thumb upwards." However the three users at the table ignored the scroll, they had more important things to discuss.
"That was awful communication." M'One began.

"Mobon simply attacked out of turn." Gabyss noted.
"I hate losing to one of the weaker groups of team Element!" M'One remarked. "We cannot make simple mistakes like this again. Now we need to find a new member before our next fight in two days."
"Will we have enough time?" Honey asked.
"Well we need someone that follows our fighting style, can work well in a group and has great communication." M'One said.
"So we need a member that can't fight, can't cooperate, and can't speak?" Gabyss joked.
"Precisely!" M'One said enthusiastically. "So then we can sacrifice him the way we sacrificed Mobon in order to live ourselves."

The group has been using this plan for multiple battles already, however they knew it was time to get their act together.
"We can't keep killing our own members in order to live ourselves." Honey finally said.
"I know a person that might actually help us win a battle or two without having to die." Gabyss finally said.
"We'll meet him tomorrow. Today we rest after the tough battle." M'One finished. The three of them finally stood up from the table and left the building just as silently as they walked in there.

Miasmic, Anch, Dazz

tak4n · 2015-05-15 07:27:43

Reserved for story

Anch

Michele · 2015-05-15 14:21:56

I want me in story.

Creature · 2015-05-15 16:29:32

What about you divide it in Acts and Chapters and then name then?

Laderw · 2015-05-15 17:39:26

2 long 4 mi

Pingohits · 2015-05-15 21:17:03

AntonioS300 wrote:

I want me in story.

it's not an ee story ant-juan

it is tak4n's own story

stop being a greedy capitalist and go back to your village

Minimania, Anch, Creature, Onjit, Mouseh

skullz17 · 2015-05-15 21:19:56

Cool. Wonder what my name would be turned into

SPT · 2015-05-15 21:33:21

Laderw wrote:

2 long 4 mi

wow thanks for the collaboration this would really help make the story better and improved

Creature, Onjit, Mouseh, Minimania

N1KF · 2015-05-15 22:47:38

skullz17 wrote:

Cool. Wonder what my name would be turned into

Me too, considering how unpronounceable mine is
I hope it is Niko

tak4n · 2015-05-16 02:13:43

AntonioS300 wrote:

I want me in story.

You're already in the story... you're in the second book. Like I told Creature and iPwner, I am not going to have people in both books.

Creature wrote:

What about you divide it in Acts and Chapters and then name then?

I can do that. E.g. "Chapter One, The rise of the Heroes" I am not sure what you mean by acts, I have "days" and "weeks" for that. But yeah I will do that I think Ty for the feedback!

Laderw wrote:

2 long 4 mi

You can skip the Setting... I always do that when I read any book. It honestly shouldn't ruin your reading experience too much. You can start reading from the actual story if you wish to do so.

Everyone wrote:

What will my name be?

Generally easy names will remain the same E.g. Theditor otherwise I might just remove some letters and numbers from your name. In the most difficult cases e.g. Master1, 0176, N1KF I might change them completely to make them usable for the story.

N1KF wrote:

Stuff

I am considering removing you from the first book. This is because I feel your role was too insignificant and I want to give you more 'spotlight' in the second book. If you want, I can keep you in the first book but as I said, I kind of want you to be involved in more action. You are one of the 2 people I am thinking doing this to, Killingpepper123 being the second one. So if you want to stay in the first book, then sure I can leave you in.

N1KF · 2015-05-16 18:51:32

tak4n wrote:

N1KF wrote:
Stuff
I am considering removing you from the first book. This is because I feel your role was too insignificant and I want to give you more 'spotlight' in the second book. If you want, I can keep you in the first book but as I said, I kind of want you to be involved in more action. You are one of the 2 people I am thinking doing this to, Killingpepper123 being the second one. So if you want to stay in the first book, then sure I can leave you in.

Sounds fair enough, as it is your book. I am not going to have my wants get in the way of your creative writing.

tak4n · 2015-05-17 07:46:34

Updated with the second part of chapter one. (Day One. Segment Two) Oh the small chapters were so fun and easy to write, I didn't lie when I said Season 2 was going to have longer chapters. I mean the chapter become 4 plus more times as long as they were in the beginning. Oh the fun times.

To do list:

- I need to squeeze in character description somewhere in chapter 1. To describe in detail how our four main heroes look like as well as the looks and personalities of other significant heroes over time.

- I need a new name for GKAbyss... Gabe will just not work. I was thinking Gabus but that sounds like Gay bus. I am also thinking Abyss but I am scared people will confuse his names with abyss type attacks. (I don't think I actually use the word abyss in my story or at least not that often so it might work.)

If anyone has any ideas on how to name GKAbyss in this story please do share with me.

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