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Silent Night - a crime story by LD3H (preview)

December 24th, 1995, close to midnight. Everywhere quiet. The roofs were full of snow. The moon was shining above the trees. The streets were frozen. But on the street... a dead man. Another person beside it, calling the police and talking nervously, "A dead person... here... Shawer Street. Come... fast...". The person ran away.

10 minutes later, the police was there. The Inspector Mark Hallaway came too. He looked at the dead man. A knife in his breast. His hand holding it. Beside a note: "Good bye cruel world". A police officer said, "Suicide, he killed himself with a knife." But the Inspector didn´t want to believe that. "Something is wrong here..." he thought. "Well, we have work tomorrow!"

Mark was fail in person. "Christmas is for children", he always said. Divorced 3 times, parents murdered a year ago, broken contact to his only brother for 5 years. His only friend was his logbook. He told it everything he underwent the past years. Today, he made a special record: "December 24th, 1995. A dead person was found on Shawer Street. It looks like suicide, but I don't want to believe that. I MUST find out what´s up with this case..." He had so many questions. "If it was suicide, why did the man kill himself ON THE STREET? He was killed with a knife! How could he write that note? He had nothing to write. The rosary he weared... Why would a Christian kill himself on December 24th?"

The next day, everyone is at work. "Only because this suicide", everyone thought. Mark was the only one who WANTED to work. He couldn´t sleep because of that case. In the autopsy room, he looked at the dead man again. "Hmm... I think I saw him somewhere..." Then the autopsyer (or doctor? please help) came. "Mr. Hallaway, this person was killed with a knife. We already found out who he is. I don't think you want to know that, but... it is......."

To be continued...

What´s your opinion? Should I continue this story?

skullz17

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Re: Silent Night - a crime story by LD3H (preview)

Meh, I don't really like crime stories that much unless they really amaze me so I think you should continue and then I'll see what I think.

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thx for sig bobithan

mangoman

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Re: Silent Night - a crime story by LD3H (preview)

Wow, this is soo awesome. I don't really read crime stories, but this is just awesome. This made me starting to like crime stories.

I think you should continue, I want to know who the dead man was!

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