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Odd story i wrote up some time ago *Long, you have been warned*

     It begins with a little forming of a tale, a tale that when spun, throws the world off of it's feet.
     I came into a strange and new world, walking around for a bit, i see a odd cat-looking thing, i try to start a conversation with him, but he walks away before i get the chance.
     Then i notice a female of the same structure as the child i had just seen walk away, i hide behind a tree, waiting for her to walk a safe distance away.
     After i had stopped hiding the child walks up to me, asking for help.
     He explains that same female is his "dream girl" and that he wants me to help bring them together.
     I was curious at how this may play out, so i agreed, transforming into a same look-alike as him, to follow with my own plan, which later on, would bring pain to all.
     I walk up to her, holding a clipboard in my hand, ready to ask her a question, she slaps me hard enough to where i spin around then fall hard onto the ground, yet i get up as if nothing happened, and strike a odd grin.
     I threw the clipboard away, and as the girl shortly looked, i took a small plank of wood and hit her hard enough on the head to knock her out.
     the child unaware, i take off with her, taking nude pictures to later use them as a bridging point, before she had awoken, i had given her to the child, whom took her into her house.
     *His, sorry.
     After a short while the girl awakens, the chold tries to get her to fall in love with him, but instead gets the same slap i once recived, but he began crying, as she tried to walk away, i had stepped into the doorway, which was dark enough to where she could only she my eyes.
     I spoke in a deep voice: Apologize to him... NOW.
     She was scared stiff, worrying what i may do to her she prfusly apologized to him, after she walks out of the room, she catches me using my iphone (To upload the pictures, little to her knowoledge) She sees nothing but says she will join the site tomorrow, which, i never knew if she had.
     The next day, many were laughing at her, and soon enough she had found out those pictures went viral (Not my fault that happened, i limited it to my site, no telling how they leaked out) She was completely broken inside, with her heart shattered due to the incident, the child comes in and gives her help.
     With the two forming together the child questioned my actions, my response being: I got you what you wanted, didn't i? He seemed disstilled at what i has spoken, before he got a chance to speak i had left the world.
It works well in italics, honestly tell me what you think of it.

Zoey2070

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From: Shakuras

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Re: Odd story i wrote up some time ago *Long, you have been warned*

I swear, this is starting to annoy me now.
http://pastebin.com/BuCnMP10
I fixed some of the problems, mainly capitalizing your I's.

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Gamer1120

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Re: Odd story i wrote up some time ago *Long, you have been warned*

It isn't really thát long...