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Ralaina

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Yeah but she said that you have to post it here, so that's why I asked her if you could do it another way if you didn't want people to see it.

Cola1

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

-Smoothed out corners.
-Added 2 block high depth.
-Shaded a little. (could only use beta grey, if not it would be horrible)
-Added 6 more eyes for 8 Eyes.

Anything else that I could improve? 1bigsmile1

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Tako

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

http://i.imgur.com/Re8gl.png
-Smoothed out corners.
-Added 2 block high depth.
-Shaded a little. (could only use beta grey, if not it would be horrible)
-Added 6 more eyes for 8 Eyes.

Anything else that I could improve? 1bigsmile1

(It's weird to discuss spiders in such high detail, but whatever)

The fangs should be exactly the same, and the entire body should be symmetrical in its anatomy. The legs could also be a bit longer, and that line down its back could be straighter. It's body is also having this weird trapezoid shape to it; spiders have a rounder-type body.

I love the head and leg detail, though. Good job on that.

[EDIT] BEE, I hope you don't mind me sharing my opinions as well. :] I can stop if you don't want me to.

Last edited by Tako (Oct 20 2011 9:45:27 pm)

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Yeah, well, you know that's just like, uh, your opinion, man.

maxiano8

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

i dont know how to post a level in a picture so can i do it by a link?

here is the link: http://beta.everybodyedits.com/games/PWr6b8GIADbEI/

                            thanks, i guess

BEE

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Cyc - I would just draw straw instead o hands, and maybe have a few pieces sticking out from his neck and belt. Google scarecrows for ideas.

Muffin - I really like your shading and your pumpkins, but for some reason, I don;t like that tall pumpkin... Hm... not sure why, but it seems too straight and perfect and not natural enough. I think your fog is fine, what blocks are you using? Make sure you can do minigames in the fog. You might want to add more variety of fog colors, I have all the grey shades shown in my palette world. The ground is fine, but think about the purpose of the ground. If it is pure decoration with no games, you need some sort of dirt pattern like Ravatroll is famous for. If you are planning on adding minis, be thinking about how to integrate them into the actual scene. One more thing, trees typically have more than three branches. Perhaps add smaller ones or make those smaller to allow for more room for others? I love the house and the green shades, but it might be beneficial to make it somewhat 3D. Like I said to another person, even if you are looking at a house face on, you can tell it is 3D because of shadows around the outside etc. Try looking at a milk carton or a box and see how you can tell it is 3D from different angles. Otherwise it looks good, just keep going!

Wolf Exile - Yours scares me, surely you will win.

Tako - I really like your idea, but am not sure what your perspective is. There isn't much more I can suggest in terms of shading except refer you to my shading on my palette thread. Shading is something that I can't just make a suggestion and itll get better. What you can do, though, is use MS paint to test out how different colors will look on the mini map. Best of luck!

Patience - I really like your concept and I think you have done a great job with making it look 3D. I will say one thing about your mansion, it would really bother me that it isn't centered! Just my opinion though. As for building the mansion, you will probably have to google images and find a style that you would like to use. Mansions are so diverse that it is hard to make any specific questions. As for the dragon, I am not sure how a dragon of that size would fit into the mansion. How did he get there in the first place? Was it built around him? Make sure that your maps are plausible even if they are fantasy. It overall looks good, but a little crowded with a lot of small pieces. Perhaps adding a light source or focusing on what is really important will reduce any crowding and make it look more realistic.

Ral - Sorry, I am only looking at those who post the picture of their level here.

Cola - looks better, but theres still something off. I think it is because it looks like the spider has been smushed. Google "spider". Notice how spiders have three clear segments, and the legs typically come from the second segment. The last segment is more rounded like a ball, and should be shaded like a ball. Keep going

Tako, you are welcome to make your own comments.

Max - search "how to post a picture on forums"

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Ralaina

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Okay then I will post 2ndStorys level here, when it's ready. Because we would love to have your opinion.

Cyral

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Wow... Tough Competition, I may post mine when Im done

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kaylee123

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

It seems like it's missing something... but I still want to be able to fill it with minis.
EDIT: Sorry for all the white space.

Last edited by kaylee123 (Oct 22 2011 11:06:26 am)

Muffin

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

I want all the feedback I can get.

Yankeestar180

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

http://i.imgur.com/TZrRN.png

I want all the feedback I can get.

Like Bee said, more branches, plus isnt the minimum world size 200 x 200??

Breadfinn

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Level got finished yesterday and posted today
Feedback would be nice :]

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Red

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

What do you need to know? It's sexyh.

What changes could I make to this?
Basically a street with children trick or treating.

It's far from finished, but I could still use some suggestions or things I could improve.

Ralaina

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

I wonder why most of the players are aimining for a realistic style of art, why not try making something surrealistic or something like that.

Koya

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

any Ideas for spaces [1/2/3]
Feed back/Improvements Please.

[ 'pas på' is danish for 'Beware' ]

Last edited by SquadFS (Oct 24 2011 11:05:51 am)

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ILoveBacon

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

what changes now?

Epicfish

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

SquadFS: That is surely the best level I have ever seen.
I really like everything; the shading and the 3D.
Whoops; I'm on your team aren't I?

Seriously; though; I think we need something at the top; there is a gaping 400x ~60/70 sized hole.

Last edited by Epicfish (Oct 25 2011 4:44:15 am)

Koya

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

SquadFS: That is surely the best level I have ever seen.
I really like everything; the shading and the 3D.
Whoops; I'm on your team aren't I?

Seriously; though; I think we need something at the top; there is a gaping 400x ~60/70 sized hole.

You can play with the map open, it's realy annoying when you are playing and you want the map open, every jump you go behind the map, missing a few rows you can play with map open.

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treejoe4

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

http://beta.everybodyedits.com/games/PWiTaJ-C8IbEI
Bee opinions pwease

Ralaina

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Treejoe, you need to post a picture. And that makes me sad.

MRBOOGAWESOME

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Treejoe, you need to post a picture. And that makes me sad.

What makes you sad about our world? The sad boy?

Ralaina

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

No it makes me sad that I have to post a picture. Since I don't want to show it to to many people.

Hammy120

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

May I have your suggestion on my level BEE?
It's not done yet.

Last edited by Hammy120 (Oct 27 2011 7:56:28 am)

ILoveBacon

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

http://i.imgur.com/zqELN.png

lol, the tardis is in the bottom left corner.... you will win just for having that there!

Shy Guy

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

Thoughts, BEE? I also get a lot of "Disqualified! This level is animated." It really gets on my nerves.

Calicara

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Re: Halloween Contest Level Feedback from Bee

http://i.imgur.com/zqELN.png

^Updated Version.
Once failgirl replaces her current picture wit this one, this post will be deleted.

Note: The deteriorating house has yet to be filled
with art since the kind of art will depend on the
kind of mini-game that we choose to make.

Thanks for the feedback Bee!

This picture is now in-accurate. We should have a better one by tonight or tomorrow.

- Failgirl101